Bealbry #2

Primary Genre: Fantasy

Word Count: 250

Description and Details:

I am writing a fantasy series and have spent a lot of time world-building and writing backstories and am now ready to start actually writing a full novel. I intended to start from the POV of a 14-year-old girl (Yasmay) writing in the third person; the series would loosely follow her arch as she grew to 19 years of age. Still, when I sat down to write, I thought to go in a different direction and start the series when she's 17 instead and recap through memories in book one. I will also post the original beginning titled Bealbry #1 and would appreciate feedback on which version you (the beta reader) prefer. Oh and apologies for any unexplained terminology.