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Wren's life seems like a fairy tale. A hard one. She loves her family, but her woodland bound, demon-run island village really sucks. Can she figure out the secrets of the magical barriers of forest and sea in time to stop the demon...
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Wren's life seems like a fairy tale. A hard one. She loves her family, but her woodland bound, demon-run island village really sucks. Can she figure out the secrets of the magical barriers of forest and sea in time to stop the demon before he breaks her spirit and his enchanted prison walls?
Apathy is in their last year of high school, and they have Apathetic Syndrome. This prevents them from feeling most emotions, which is why they are lonely without friends, unable to find common ground with anyone. When Apathy is chosen for Project Regenesis, a global battle to determine whether all...
Apathy is in their last year of high school, and they have Apathetic Syndrome. This prevents them from feeling most emotions, which is why they are lonely without friends, unable to find common ground with anyone. When Apathy is chosen for Project Regenesis, a global battle to determine whether all emotions are kept, or some of them removed, or all of them removed, Apathy decides to battle to remove all emotions so they would have a chance at finding friends.
Apathy discovers that the battles are done through debates, and when someone loses a debate, they die. The deaths are caused by self-destructing devices implanted in Candidates’ heads, detonating when their levels of doubt or guilt rise to lethal levels. Apathy has no issue with this, willing to sacrifice the few for the many to ensure the survival of mankind and Earth as well as the accomplishment of their goal to find friends.
But then they meet Harmony, a free-spirited woman who is a firm believer that humans are at their best with all emotions. With her, Apathy begins to discover why emotions are important as they begin to feel more emotions. Because of this, they begin to feel doubt, and they realize they don’t want to lose Harmony. Thus, Apathy must find a way to overcome their doubt and either join Harmony’s battle or recruit Harmony before they have to face each other and debate to the death.
Zilla falls from the sky directly onto a mysterious and roguish hare, with a zipper in the back of her head and no memory of who she is and where she came from. Can she navigate the desert, a dangerous place populated by desperate and powerful creatures? Will she escape...
Zilla falls from the sky directly onto a mysterious and roguish hare, with a zipper in the back of her head and no memory of who she is and where she came from. Can she navigate the desert, a dangerous place populated by desperate and powerful creatures? Will she escape the clutches of two goddesses of foreordination bent on destroying one another and possibly even existence itself? One thing is for sure. Destiny can be cruel, but Fate is a real bitch.
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Almost the entire town had visited Riddson Highschool through the lens of their at home news channel after the shooting and a year prior to when Mira Patel even first stepped foot there. After being disconnected from the world because of unforeseen events of the past, Mira finds herself falling...
Almost the entire town had visited Riddson Highschool through the lens of their at home news channel after the shooting and a year prior to when Mira Patel even first stepped foot there. After being disconnected from the world because of unforeseen events of the past, Mira finds herself falling out of place in a world supposedly built for her. She discovers not only the web of trauma that is Riddson High – but herself entangled with it. Pink Elephant explores life, death and everything in between. After all, if you changed the news channel to one from New York, you wouldn’t be able to miss Mira’s face on the news either.
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Wacky fantasy adventure that is also a family tree at the same time. It's kind of Lord of the rings ish but with sarcasm and lots of humor. I am writing it for my children so they can remember the names of their family members and it's now 6 years...
Wacky fantasy adventure that is also a family tree at the same time. It's kind of Lord of the rings ish but with sarcasm and lots of humor. I am writing it for my children so they can remember the names of their family members and it's now 6 years in the making.
I would like to know if I have too much dialogue in there
This is a sequel but does it stand up in its own right? Could someone read it and not get confused? It is an historical crime escapade set mainly in 1951 but involving time travel and a bit of subtle romance and plenty of mystery as well as some fantasy....
This is a sequel but does it stand up in its own right? Could someone read it and not get confused? It is an historical crime escapade set mainly in 1951 but involving time travel and a bit of subtle romance and plenty of mystery as well as some fantasy. Multi-genre! The plot of the first book in the series was very complex so does this one hold up? I will eat my hat if there are any major grammatical errors.
A part of my Percy Jackson AU where the main character learns archery and sword fighting
Jamila Idris is one of a handful of super-powered teenage soldiers forced to fight for her country in a war between all the nations of the world. All supers gain the same powers: near-invulnerability, super-strength, and their body temperatures rise to potentially lethal levels. Their power will burn them to...
Jamila Idris is one of a handful of super-powered teenage soldiers forced to fight for her country in a war between all the nations of the world. All supers gain the same powers: near-invulnerability, super-strength, and their body temperatures rise to potentially lethal levels. Their power will burn them to ashes if they use it too long.
Her friends, London, a young, superpowered boy, and Dauntless, a fearless jetpack commando, help keep her safe and sane through the trenches and crumbling metropolis filled with deadly enemy soldiers.
A government official questions her loyalty as she is taken prisoner and finds out that her country might not be the innocent defender it claims to be. She meets Annette, another super-powered teen, and even though they are enemies, they grow close and plan Jamila’s escape together.
Ultimately, Jamila is put on trial for treason and set to be executed by her own country.
Throughout the war she moves from youth to warrior and puts the lives of her friends above all else. The emotional toll comes high as the war kills and shatters friends and family alike as Jamila and her friends struggle to put an end to the war by embarking on a desperate mission behind enemy lines.
Dauntless is a YA novel of 101,000 words. It’s part, “Attack on titan”, and “The violent century”. It is a world war 1esque sci-fi story set in a world of jetpacks and superpowers as told by the memoirs of an unreliable narrator.